Monday, April 13, 2009

Haikus on blogger's block

I

A blinking black line,
Stares at me from fields of white
Mocks my empty mind.


II

With wine on my breath,
And fingers on my keyboard
To write or to sleep?

III

Boredom, mistaken
As zen state of nothingness
Creates bad haikus

2 comments:

  1. Avoid metaphors in a haiku. What is expected out of you is to present a detached simple observation without any trickery or word play. 17 syllables is not a pre-requisite. A strong image is.

    .An example,
    .
    Oh snail,
    you were there
    - yesterday!
    .
    a firefly
    feeding on marijuana,
    - illumination!
    .
    Plural of haiku is haiku. Not haikus. Though I do like the last one!

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  2. nice piece of poetry...still discovering ur poetic skills....keep penning!!

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